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I with the critique squad in
I'll throw some of my thoughts on your portrait your way
First off, I like the idea and concept.
Old place, provocative semi nudity with throwuoffbalance item like the gasmask. It is not entirely original, but it is not your avarage mainstream vanilla either.
I don't have much experience with models, but she does seem to be into the concept and not "just there". which is a good thing and helps with the vibe for the viewer.
now for a few critical points in my opinion.
composition, an important factor and I feel it is lacking alittle here. For engaging non-familyalbumvacation feel I always tend to put the object of my focus anywhere else but the center.
B&W vs Color, always abit tricky which to go with. I am afraid though that in this one the B&W you ended up with left your model blended in with the background too much. Alot of grey here, which sort of dulls the whole thing down abit which i am sure was not the intention.
Light, most important of all is the use of light an aspect I know I myself have given too little attention in the past. You might have benefitted from an extra light source here, I am not experienced with using light sources as such, but there are some good guides out there.
on the top of my head, I would do a few things on the computer to post-edit here to correct a few things.
I would play around with the B&W to get more contrast go for the arty angle, and play around with a cropping tool. I would be tempted to darken out the left side and crop some of it out, leave her halfway in darkness as if either stepping into or out of it either hiding or chasing sorta feel.
overall a great idea, just needs a bit of tweaking
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